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Project Novel - The Summer Season

Project Runway will finally be back on August 20th – I can’t wait! This time it’s airing on Lifetime, so don’t miss it.

In the meantime, Tim offers me some editorial feedback on my new book. Enjoy!

Tim steps into the workroom, looking fit and relaxed. “Authors,” he calls. “May I ask you to gather around?”

“Tim!” says Lisa. “Hi, I’ve missed you. And, uh, it’s just me.”

“Oh, that’s right,” says Tim. “We have to isolate you writers, otherwise you never get anything done.” He moves closer to the worktable and studies her work-in-progress. “Tell me about this.”

“Okay, but first … did you hear the news?”

“What news?”

“That novel you critiqued? It won! It’s going to make its debut in my Fall 2010 line!”

“Lisa, that’s wonderful! I’m so pleased.” Tim takes off his glasses to dab at his eyes. “You know how proud I am of all my authors.”

Lisa nods, tearing up a little, too. “I couldn’t have done it without you.”

“Well, now, that’s pure hyperbole, but I like a little hyperbole in my day.” He chuckles and puts his glasses back on. “So! This appears to be a contemporary realistic YA novel.”

“Yes.” Lisa straightens up.

“Another teen boy narrator, I see,” says Tim. He directs a piercing gaze at her over the top of his glasses. “Before we go any further, I feel I must warn you.”

Lisa waits nervously.

“It is imperative that you distinguish the voice of this main character from the voice of Blake, the narrator of your first book.”

“Right, absolutely!” says Lisa. “I’m working hard on that.”

“Good, good.” Tim rests a finger on his cheek. “First person, present tense again?”

“Yes.” Lisa tries not to sound defensive. “I like the immediacy when I’m writing in a boy’s voice.”

Tim turns the novel around, appraising it from another angle. “The setting is … interesting. Will it strain credulity?”

Lisa blanches. “Uh, I hope not.”

“Hmm.” Tim taps his cheek, then sighs. “I want you to remember that I’m here to help you. So please take this criticism in the spirit in which it’s intended.”


“It’s just that … I’m concerned about your taste level.”

Lisa freezes.

Tim points to some eye-popping details. “This is a lot of adornment for one chapter.”

“I … I see what you mean. I’ll scale back.”

Tim lifts the story arc, peering at it in confusion. “What happened to the middle?”

“Well,” says Lisa. “I, uh, got a little lost in the middle. I’m still stitching together scenes to connect the narrative.”

“Lisa, these plot holes are a huge problem.”

“I know. I’m not finished. But the climax is good, right? And the ending?”

Tim examines the later chapters, then says seriously, “It’s stunning.”

Lisa beams.

“The details mesh nicely here, and as I always tell my authors …”

“God is in the details,” Lisa says in unison with him.

He smiles. “Well, I’ll leave you to it, then, with one final caveat: there’s a fine line between edgy and questionable. Don’t lose sight of that line.”

“I won’t.”

“Make it work!”

Oh Tim, I ever endeavor …


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Jul. 23rd, 2009 01:46 pm (UTC)
Love it! And August 20th is already marked on my calendar.

Ooooh, a stunning ending! Go you!!!

Jul. 23rd, 2009 01:48 pm (UTC)
Heehee! I don't know if it's really stunning ... I just wanted to have Tim say that. I always love it when he says that to a designer.

Jul. 23rd, 2009 03:29 pm (UTC)
I am so glad I peeked into L J... I think I need to Tim to check this draft for me!
Jul. 24th, 2009 02:54 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you peeked in, too! I'm sending Tim right over.
Jul. 23rd, 2009 03:36 pm (UTC)

(um, yeah, a big PR fan too)
Jul. 23rd, 2009 05:06 pm (UTC)
Tim always puts things in perspective, eh? Love it!

(Am wondering if I can squeeze yet another competitive reality show into my fall lineup?)
Jul. 24th, 2009 02:56 pm (UTC)
Even if you don't watch the whole show, you should tune in for the special before the season starts - with favorite designers from previous seasons competing! Such personalities!
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Jul. 24th, 2009 02:57 pm (UTC)
He must be obeyed!
Jul. 24th, 2009 09:21 pm (UTC)
"Make it work." Words to live by. Do you suppose Tim has time for a quick pit stop in my brain? It could use a tweaking.
Jul. 25th, 2009 01:04 am (UTC)
I LOVE it when Tim comes to your blog! This entire post is brilliant. And hysterical.

(I'm soooo glad Tim approves of your project. Phew.)

— Steph

Jul. 25th, 2009 05:19 am (UTC)
YAY! It's TIM!

Love this post with a hearty, hearty love. You can do it!
Jul. 27th, 2009 09:07 pm (UTC)
Oh, that troublesome middle! And plot holes! But hey, I figure if I get through a first draft without plot holes, my characters aren't growing and developing enough. (No idea if that's true, but it comforts me.)

Love the inner Tim! Does he go out on loan? :)
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